What should be added to this paragraph to make the writer's argument more effective?

Write a literary analysis essay about an intercalary chapter of the grapes of wrath. your essay should examine how the structure and language support the overall purpose, and it should include specific examples from the text to support your claim. your essay should include the following elements: • a claim that takes a clear stand on the author's purpose, supported by main points • evidence from the text that supports your claim and main points • commentary that the reader understand how your evidence should be interpreted • an introduction, body and conclusion that organize the content of your essay

Read the excerpt from "home front diary." jimmy simmons stopped by today to tell me that he had enlisted in the army. he asked me if i would write to him, and i said i would. i told him that i've been writing to my uncle arthur and susan's cousin john for about a year, and as an experienced correspondent i had some advice about all the censorship. "don't write down any information about your location or the number of soldiers in your unit because the censors will cut all of that away," i said. "in my experience, loose lips not only sink ships, they make letters look like snowflake decorations! ” well, he belly laughed over that one. how is the author's perspective different from jimmy's? the author has been to war and she can give jimmy advice. jimmy has become a soldier and does not believe the author’s advice. the author has experience writing to soldiers but jimmy does not. jimmy has more experience at letter writing than the author.

Aside from his general attitude toward women, what kept cisneros father from appreciating her writing?