BS Common Core ELA 12 A Quiz
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Read the paragraph from Lucy's narrative.
Lucy decides that this may not be the most effective
I could see that my neighbor was struggling with the lone
way to tell her story. If she wants to create more
bag of groceries cradled in her arms, but I wasn't sure
suspense in the plot, what would be the best possible
what I should do. Grandma June-what all the
change she could make?
neighborhood kids had called her for as long as I could
remember-had always been the one to care for us, to
• She could remove the background information about
help us build stronger forts, to grow better flowers, and to
her past with Grandma June, allowing suspense to
learn from our mistakes. To ask if she needed help with
build as the reader wonders who Grandma June iS.
something as simple as carrying in one bag of groceries
She could include more reasons she is hesitant to
would be like shouting to the world that she was aging,
assist Grandma June, allowing suspense to build as
that she was no longer as strong as she once had been.
the reader begins to believe she will not help.
Hesitantly, I walked to the wooden gate that divided our
• She could start with the last sentence instead,
front lawn from hers and stood there as the package she
allowing suspense to build as the reader wonders why
was carrying threatened to spill from her arms.
to she is hesitant to ask if Grandma June needs help.
• She could begin with more stories about Grandma
June, allowing suspense to build as the reader
wonders why she is talking about Grandma June.
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