In no fewer than three sentences, critique the following paragraph. Explain where it could be improved. Then, in your own words, rewrite the paragraph to make its writing
stronger. Make sure you include a hook, supporting evidence, and a topic sentence. Use
correct spelling and grammar.

Playing in the snow is one of my happiest childhood memories. The winter offers more than
time for kids to have fun. There are many things to do in the snow. It is unfortunate that so
many people find the wintertime annoying. More people should step outside to enjoy the
snow. I am glad I grew up where it snows. (5 points)

d) she is both terrified and excited by the idea of returning to school.

a) she takes one day at a time.

d) she felt like she was an object of ridicule.

d) she tells her daughter not to worry about it because things will get better.\

b) elnora needs money for books and out-of-town tuition. she will raise the money herself.

1. read the following excerpt from franklin d. roosevelt's "fireside chat 19":

on the other side of the picture, we must learn also to know that guerilla warfare against the germans in, let us say serbia or norway, us; that a successful russian offensive against the germans us; and that british successes on land or sea in any part of the world strengthen our hands.

remember always that germany and italy, regardless of any formal declaration of war, consider themselves at war with the united states at this moment just as much as they consider themselves at war with britain or russia. and germany puts all the other republics of the americas into the same category of enemies. the people of our sister republics of this hemisphere can be honored by that fact.  

the true goal we seek is far above and beyond the ugly field of battle. when we resort to force, as now we must, we are determined that this force shall be directed toward ultimate good as well as against immediate evil. we americans are not destroyers — we are builders.

analyze the effectiveness of this excerpt. how does it function within the speech as a whole? how does the structure of the excerpt to convey the speech's purpose and key points? support your argument with evidence from the speech. (10 points)