3. Revise the following paragraph from a student essay. Focus on making the main claim clearer, strengthening the evidence, and addressing problems with plagiarism.
You may choose to use portions of the paragraph as they are written. Underline any
phrases or sentences that you copy from the original paragraph. Then use bold font
to highlight any sentences you added to the paragraph. (15 points)
Student paragraph:
Eating healthy foods is a really cool thing to do for your body. Healthy food can
actually slow down the aging process. Foods that are high in anti-oxidants and
omega-3 fatty acids protect cells and help the cells live longer (p. 20 -- Olivia
Anderson, a natural foods chef). Living longer lets you do more. Ian Jones on pg. 15:
"People in their 80s give more back to their communities than those who died in their
60s ever did." Healthy food means a long good life. And living longer is awesome!