Why does the summary of the beginnings of Maasai needs to be revised

Read the summary of the section of "The Beginnings of the Maasai," where the volcanic eruption and its results are described.

As a result of a volcanic eruption, Enkai and the cattle were thrown into the sky. Enkai wanted to save his cattle. He grew a tree that bridged the sky and the earth. The cattle walked down the tree to Neiterkob. Neiterkob and the Maasai tribe took over caring for the cattle.

Why does the summary need to be revised?

- The summary lacks transition that connects ideas.

Explanation:

As per the question, the given summary of the text 'The Beginnings of Maasai' requires to be amended as 'it misses out the transition which is very necessary to link the ideas and ensure smooth flow of the story.' Transitions are a very important part of writing especially when summarizing as it not only associates the ideas and events that took place in the plot but also assist in giving a unified form to the story. Thus, it promotes comprehension and understanding which the given summary lacks, and hence, it must be revised.

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