Can someone revise my poem for word choice and rhyme patterns? i feel like my rhymes aren't really good, and i would like some in correcting them.
even when the teasing vines
force me, submerge me in the adhesive oil,
she's there to lead the way,
her golden scruff as bright as foil,
the path, narrow and taunting, is unfrightening
as long as her leaning head maintains my balance.
what will i ever do as the tangled hair grows light,
as her gentle cranium becomes lifeless, lowered, long;
i wish to never visualize that future, and hopeful i never will, for if it is reality, i could not tread through the ghostly forest any longer, the ghosts shall devour my shriveled songs.

In what ways is crooks even more lonely than the other men on the ranch

Read this excerpt from “what i hope to leave behind.” for a number of years it took so much vitality to keep the home going, and that home represented so many different kinds of activities, that none of us had any urge to go outside of this sphere. if “what i hope to leave behind” was the subject of a class discussion, why might paraphrasing this sentence be ? you could analyze the key themes while also staying true to the original language. you could summarize the key ideas, which would shorten the length of the excerpt. you could use your own ideas and concepts, which would add important information. you could rephrase it in your own words, which might clarify the meaning of the excerpt.

Gandhi is a man of honor, of truth, 1) of passion 2) of one mind 3) of same beliefs 4) of a religion