Read the following passage, which is lacking in vivid description, imagery, and dialogue. Rewrite the passage to include description and dialogue in a way that helps convey a nervous tone. Passage
My brother Felipe and I walked up to the abandoned house at the end of the street. Felipe opened the gate, and we walked forward. We walked all the way up to the door and knocked, but no one answered. I leaned over the railing and looked in the window, and it was pretty empty in there. Then there was a noise inside the house, and we left.

a. beside the fence

explanation:

i’m writing a memoir and i’ve been given the great suggestion of placing a ‘sub-narrative’ within some of the chapters – sort of, what was going on with me in the grand scheme of things.

i was wondering how to format this so that it is very obvious we are stepping out the of story.

firstly is a change in font from serif to sans workable? i also use dashes for a scene change. was thinking of using a different scene-changer too.

here’s a (shortened) example:

university – or what’s known as ‘uni’ in australia – were some of the best days of my life. where else do you get to potter around in a great location, have very little responsibility, learn lots of things, do lots of things and walk out four years later with a bonus – a degree!

with my university years i had immersed myself into community of intelligent ambitious people. generally everyone had a confidence about themselves. they knew where they were going in life and weren’t threatened by others.

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next normal paragraph continues here…

(sorry couldn’t show the fonts in this comment field)

too much?