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3. Syntax can be rearranged to create a different experience for the reader. Read the
following passage while paying attention to the syntax.

“We're on a flat, open stretch of ground. A plain of hard-packed dirt. Behind the tributes across from
me, I can see nothing, indicating either a steep downward slope or even a cliff. To my right lies a
lake. To my left and back, sparse piney woods.”
Suzanne Collins, The Hunger Games

Try to rewrite the passage using as many of the same words as in the original, but
format it in a different way to change the syntax. Does your re-write change the feeling
of the passage?

"where are you taking me? " the car hesitated, or rather gave a faint whirring click, as if information, somewhere, was dropping card by punch- slotted card under electric eyes. "to the psychiatric center for research on regressive tendencies." he got in. the door shut with a soft thud. the police car rolled through the night avenues, flashing its dim lights ahead. which statement best describes the intended aesthetic impact of this excerpt? o a. by showing leonard obeying the police car, the author reinforces the theme of surrendering one s individuality. o b. by relating the way the car responds, the author underscores the theme of the dangers of a mechanized of society o c. by having leonard, a seemingly normal person, taken to a psychiatric center, the author injects irony, leaving the reader surprised o d. by showing leonard communicating with another person, the author satisfies his need for human contact, leaving the reader hopeful

Read the excerpt from the land. of my brothers, i was closest with robert. i suppose, in part, being the same year's children made us close, but there were other things too. we had been together practically since birth, and we always took care of each other. when i got into trouble, robert was there to pull me out of it if he could, or at least to see me through it, and i did the same for him. the passage provides evidence of why paul and robert have physical conflicts. paul and robert avoid social conflicts. paul is the least influenced by robert. paul is motivated to ask robert for .

Besides the revisions listed in the paragraph, what else can deepak do to strengthen his paper?