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3. revise the following paragraph from a student essay. focus on making the main claim clearer, strengthening the evidence, and addressing problems with plagiarism. you may choose to use portions of the paragraph as they are written. underline any phrases or sentences that you copy from the original paragraph. then use bold font to highlight any sentences you added to the paragraph. (15 points) student paragraph: eating healthy foods is a really cool thing to do for your body. healthy food can actually slow down the aging process. foods that are high in anti-oxidants and omega-3 fatty acids protect cells and the cells live longer (p. 20 -- olivia anderson, a natural foods chef). living longer lets you do more. ian jones on pg. 15: "people in their 80s give more back to their communities than those who died in their 60s ever did." healthy food means a long good life. and living longer is awesome!

Ead this excerpt from the introduction to wheels of change by sue macy. imagine a population imprisoned by their very clothing; the stiff corsets, heavy skirts, and voluminous petticoats that made it difficult to take a deep breath, let alone exercise. add to that the laws and social conventions that cemented a man's place as head of the household and holder of the purse strings. how suffocated women must have felt. and how liberated they must have been as they pedaled their wheels toward new horizons. why does the author include this excerpt?

Will anyone be able to check for grammatical errors and give an opinion on the essay itself? write about the following topic: some people believe that allowing children to make their own cholces on everyday matters (such as food, clothes and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that affect them. discuss both these views and give your own opinion. —— nowadays, in this busy and fast developing world teaching children from an early age to cope with their own decisions (such as food, clothes etc.) and then take the coincidences after that is something that a lot of people believe that it is important for them. on the other hand other people think that it might end up in a society of humans who put their wishes before anyone else's. but which one of these views will predominate? firstly, the people who allow their children to make their own decisions are the people who everyone should look up to. it is important to let your children learn from the mistakes their make. the parents can not be with them all the time every day and for that reason, teaching them to deal with their decisons or even problems will them in the future. of course, there are always disadvantages such as some people may really forget about that their children will need them at a certain point in life and may loose connection whit them. but that is why it should have that moderately path, where kids will make their own decisions but will feel comfortable to always ask for a advice tueur parents. on the other hand, there are and the second type of parents which think that too much individualism is not good. it really depends on the parents how they will teach their children to carry on with the independence they have. a lot of them might forget that they are still kids and will need and advices from time to time and because of that the parents turn their kids in individuals who only think about their own wishes due to the fact that they are let on their own and have to cope with everyone and everything by themselves. in conclusion, i think that the best decision someone can make is to look up to the first type of parents. that way they will be able to train their children to become independent people who will respect the wishes of others and they will be able to cope with their decisions in the future when they need it.