Hey guys looking for feedback and any mistakes on a small writing prompt that someone wrote for me. August 1st, 1876. One century after the United States signed the Declaration of Independence, Colorado was admitted into Union as the 38th state. What many people didn’t realize until many years later, was the beauty of this magnificent state. It is filled with mountains, rivers, lakes, and so much more. The days began with a beautiful sunrise and ended with an equally beautiful sunset. The winters were full of snow and the summers full with life. This is why I chose to make this beautiful state my home, at the age of thirty three. My family and I moved to a small town called Aspen. For the first few years it was amazing. In the winter my family and I would go snowboarding, and in the summer we would take long walks in the beautiful mountains. But it wasn’t like this forever. In February of 1995, my wife was struck with cancer. The doctors said she was not going to make it and to prepare for her death. With great sorrow, I made preparations. Since I could no longer afford our house, I got ready to sell it. My wife got her will in order and she began to make peace with herself as she fought her inevitable fate. Family was always coming over to bring us food and comfort. My wife died in August of 1995. With heavy hearts, we sold the house and made way for Vail to start a new life. This town was similar to Aspen, but was filled with new people and new beginnings. I decided to write a book, wanting a new hobby to take my mind off my wife. I had always been a decent writer, but my wife dying brought new light to writing. I spent hours tucked in my office working on my book. In one of the rare moments that I was out, I met someone. We met at a coffee shop, when she came up to me and introduced herself. She said her name was Isabel and asked me about my life. We talked for hours that day about my life and hers. We soon began to meet every Saturday at this small coffee shop. She would listen to my life story and then I would listen to hers. Every weekday I would work on my book, excited to see her on Saturday. Soon we started dating. It was then that I truly started to heal. A year later we decided to get married. Our marriage was one of the happiest days of my life and at that moment I knew that my life was filled with many more pleasant days. I completed my book just months after. The book is called Passing of The Dead. In this book I talk of all the hardships in my life. I talk of the sorrow my dead wife brought me. Of the gaping hole she left in me with her death. But then I talk about healing. How Isabel showed me to make the hole smaller. How she showed me to fill the sorrowful hole of her death with the memories of our past. In the last chapter of the book I move on to one final, important lesson that I learned. This last chapter is all about finding optimism and being hopeful for a better future. I was lucky when I decided to move to Vail. I was lucky when Isabel came up to me that day. Because of my hope and optimism, I let Isabel in my life. And my life has once again returned into a state of happiness, a state that I thought I would never see again. So I come here today, asking all of you one favor. Next time you feel that you are in pain, do not dwell in your sorrows. Do not only think of the painand dwell in it. Instead, think of all the happy memories before the pain. Be hopeful and optimistic of a better future. Because one day, you will look back on your moments of sorrow and be thankful. Thankful that you experienced everything. Because those experiences are the hands that mold you. And if you dwell in the pain, it will mold you into a lesser person than if you had not done so and instead been optimistic and hopeful.

Voluntourism: an opportunity too good to be true a speech to the student body of evergreen high [1] picture this: it's spring break, and you fly off to some country where there's lush rainforests and beautiful, blue coastlines to explore. there's also people in need, so you decide to blend your vacation with volunteering. volunteering as a tourist, or voluntourism, seems like a great way to explore new regions and people at the same time. however, this "volunteer plus travel" experience can actually harm local communities. while many teens might view traveling and volunteering abroad as a worthwhile adventure, there are more genuine and effective ways to make a difference. [2] most would agree that volunteering in general is a worthy use of time. however, what if you found out the children you are "" are actually being kept in poor conditions so voluntourists will spend money to come to the local area? dale rolfe, a supporter of ethical voluntourism, explains the shocking reality that "animal sanctuaries and orphanages are often manufactured for the voluntourist…encouraging a cycle of exploiting the very animals and children the volunteers are trying to ." [3] proponents of the "volunteer plus travel" experience also argue that traveling to new places builds character and is a valuable way to learn about different cultures. with voluntourism, however, participants often pursue experiences that are all about them. for example, they sign up to build a school for a gold star on their resume, but they have no real building skills and take jobs away from local construction workers (schulten). or, they arrive to teach english but instead take selfies with the locals. one world traveler and ethical voluntourist believes voluntourism "can perpetuate small minded views of the world by taking insulated, fake, and structured experiences and selling them as unabridged and eye opening" (carlos). the voluntour experience is a mirage. the voluntourist's eyes are not opened to real life at the destination, and lasting change is not achieved. [4] if you want a genuine experience where you can see a lasting impact, there are better options than voluntourism. you can volunteer in your local community. give an hour every week to your town's animal rescue. serve monthly dinners to the homeless. be a reliable, positive influence on a child who needs a mentor. studies show that volunteering and forming lasting relationships with those you has a positive impact on your physical and emotional health. in fact, blood pressure is reduced, memory is improved, and rates of depression are reduced (michaels). [5] there is another reason to look into alternatives to voluntourism. did you know the average "voluntour" travel package costs $3,400 (rolfe)? could that travel money be better spent? if the world's citizens are your passion, it could go to an international organization. if you care about education, your funds can be used to buy books for students in faraway lands. if you want villagers to have clean water, contribute funds to local efforts to dig wells. if you want to experience a different culture, travel to the country as a guest, and learn from the locals how you can best them after you've returned home. but do not voluntour. [6] in reality, there are better ways to make a difference. voluntourism might appear to be an adventure that blends travel and others, but it does little except provide a costly, superficial experience that might actually do more harm than good. so, volunteer where you are most needed-at home, where you can stay to see the job through and form genuine, lasting relationships. choose a beautiful coastline closer to home and send the travel money you saved to an international organization that will put it to good use. whatever you do, don't turn someone else's hardship into your vacation. which paragraphs address the counterclaim of the argument? paragraphs 1 and 6 paragraphs 2 and 3 paragraphs 3 and 4 paragraphs 4 and 5

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Dylan is of course enormously influential. springsteen, who referred to him as “the father of my country” in his new born to run memoir, is one of many who were once known as “new dylans.” every singer-songwriter with a personal story to tell owes him a debt, and hearing the above lines read or sung aloud, with their knack for internal rhyme, call up inevitable parallels to the dense playful language of rap. –“dylan's nobel prize settles debate: rock lyrics are poetry,” dan deluca which piece of evidence supports the claim that dylan’s rock lyrics are like poetry? he is enormously influential. his lyrics feature internal rhyme. singer-songwriters owe him a debt. someone called him “the father of my country.”