LMK what you think about my in-equality essay ...

Here is a bit of a few pages

To start off I am not white

Here's my review, the beginning section feels like an attack on white people. Personally, I can be in a room with a white person and feel comfortable because I do not judge them based on their color but by the content of their character. “I look to a day when people will not be judged by the color of their skin, but by the content of their character.” -Martin Luther King. A lot of the language used feels too simple, too repetitious, and I'm not saying use words like "unequivocally," but try to spice up the writing. I agree with a lot of the things that have been typed, such as we are discriminated more against by a whole lot and there's statistics for this and I think you should include some just to hammer the point home. I noticed some parts are phrased weirdly aka "hard to read text."

Explanation:

3.5 stars, needs more exciting language and better phrasing.

she is later raised by him and his wife, madame valmonde, who sees her as gift from god, as the couple cannot have their own children. later, desiree falls in love with a wealthy man, armand aubigny, and they get married.

the following key ideas correctly express the key sentence.

restate key idea: most people can learn to swim in ten short lessons.

restate key idea: the majority of water-accident victims require mouth-to-mouth breathing.

restate key idea: an empty, tightly closed gallon jug will support a tired swimmer.  

restate key idea: first aid is to prevent accidents as well as assist in rescue.

explanation: the key idea needs to have the same topic as the key sentence (drowning and safety).