This journal entry will be completed in two parts. In this lesson, you will examine how different sentence types can add variety and interest to writing. Part of your learning will involve revising your own writing to improve sentence variety. Now, before continuing with the lesson, you will complete the first half of your entry. Write a short, four-to-five-sentence paragraph about a topic of your choosing. Then, after you have completed this lesson, come back to the paragraph you wrote. Analyze your writing to identify areas where you could revise using different sentence types to add interest to your work. Revise the paragraph using the techniques you have learned. Your completed journal entry should have both your original and your revised paragraph.

Answer and Explanation:

Original paragraph:

With each passing day I am more astonished, and frightened by the responsibility of a large part of the population in the midst of the pandemic in which we are living. People refuse to wear protective masks and continue to cause crowds as if nothing is happening. And even worse they are putting other people at risk as well as putting themselves. That way we will never be able to, return to the normal life we had before.

What should be revised: It would be more interesting to put phrases that are better structured and more impersonal to give credibility to the text. In addition, it is necessary to organize the connectors between the dependent sentences, as they are positioned with the incorrect punctuation. However, it is necessary to revise the position of the commas.

Revised paragraph:

with each passing day it is possible to perceive more and more people being irresponsible with their own health and with the health of those around them. This is because, these people are unconcerned with the pandemic that is plaguing the whole planet and continue to leave the house without wearing a protective mask and continue causing people to gather. This behavior must be ended immediately, or we will never be able to return to the normal life we had.

a solenoid is created by wrapping a l = 90 m long wire around a hollow tube of diameter d = 4.5 cm.   the wire diameter is d = 0.9 mm.   the solenoid wire is then connected to a power supply so that a current of i = 9 a flows through the wire.

randomized variablesl = 90 m

d = 4.5 cm

d = 0.9 mm

i = 9 a                                          

write an expression for the number of turns, n, in the solenoid. you do not need to take into account the diameter of the wire in this calculation.

calculate the number of turns, n, in the solenoid.

write an expression for the length of the solenoid (l2) in terms of the diameter of the hollow tube d.

calculate the length of the solenoid (l2)   in meters.

calculate the magnitude of the magnetic field at the center of the solenoid in teslas.

explanation:

it ends with a marriage, but also with prospero giving up his power.

the tempest is a play written by william shakespeare between 1610-1611, it narrates the story of prospero a magician that sets a storm to wreck a ship, this sets the story to kill the king of naples. while it is a romantic style play, it isn´t traditional because of the ending, it end with the marriage and the magician giving up his powers.