HELP Practice
Revise the three sentences below. Carefully read and underline any nonspecific or overused language you find. Then revise each sentence by replacing the words you circled with clear, specific language. An example has been completed for you.

Example sentence -
Before: The girl went down to the ocean and saw some cool things.
After: My best friend Leslie strolled happily down to the edge of Back Cove and gazed delightedly at the colorful windsurfers zooming back and forth.
Before: We had a fine time at the big thing the other night.
After:My best friend and I had a awesome time at the fair last night.
Before: There was this one animal at that place we passed that was pretty cool.
After: They're was a huge mountain lion at the zoo we passed. It was awesome when it swiped it's claws at us!
Before: At school, we did many neat, fun things.
After:
Clear and Precise Writing
Write a description of a place that is important to you. Write at least seven sentences. Use strong and vivid word choices (especially verbs) to help readers connect to your feelings about your place. Use the box below to write your description.

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Explanation:

author – information on the internet with a listed author is one indication of a credible site. the fact that the author is willing to stand behind the information presented (and in some cases, include his or her contact information) is a good indication that the information is reliable.

date – the date of any research information is important, including information found on the internet. by including a date, the website allows readers to make decisions about whether that information is recent enough for their purposes.

sources – credible websites, like books and scholarly articles, should cite the source of the information presented.

domain – some domains such as .com, .org, and .net can be purchased and used by any individual. however, the domain .edu is reserved for colleges and universities, while .gov denotes a government website. these two are usually credible sources for information (though occasionally a university will assign a .edu address to each of its students for personal use, in which case use caution when citing). be careful with the domain .org, because .org is usually used by non-profit organizations which may have an agenda of persuasion rather than education.

site design – this can be very subjective, but a well-designed site can be an indication of more reliable information. good design make information more easily accessible.

writing style – poor spelling and grammar are an indication that the site may not be credible. in an effort to make the information presented easy to understand, credible sites watch writing style closely.