Jamal stood at the edge of the track. He pulled his hat brim lower to shade his eyes from the glare of the sun. He watched the crowd. Some of the parents gazed silently over at the runners who were getting ready to compete. Other parents sat laughing and talking in the bright afternoon
sun. The sun felt good on Jamal's arms. His tee shirt rippled in the warm breeze,
Jamal leaned down to tie his shoes before the big race. As his fingers tugged on the laces, suddenly he could see himself back in Annapolis
in second grade, trying to tie a very small pair of laces. On that morning six years ago, Uncle Bill had showed up at Jamal's school to watch Jamal run
in the May Relay. Jamal had raised his hand in class when the teacher asked, "Who wants to run in the relay race this year?"
For Jamal, that was the most exciting experience in second grade. In bed, on many nights before the May Relay, he had thought about it. He
had tried to imagine how it would feel to run as fast as he could, as fast as the wind, pumping his muscles and propelling his body around the circle
of the track
Then the day had arrived, the day of the big event. Uncle Bill had whispered in his ear, "Running feels good, Jamal. Lift your knees, focus
your mind, race along that path." Jamal had felt a surge of love for his uncle. "You're the best, Uncle Bill!"
Today, Uncle Bill was far from Jamal's school. No family had come to see Jamal compete on the track today, but the sun warmed his
shoulders and he smiled. "Running feels good, Jamal," he thought to himself. "Lift your knees, focus your mind, race along that path."
How is plot developed in this passage?
1. through personal conflict between Jamal and Uncle Bill
2. through comparison of Jamal's and Uncle Bill's outlooks on life
O 3. through resolution of Jamal's ill feelings based on memories of Uncle Bill
4. through flashback to a time when Jamal was inspired by Uncle Bill's coaching

the following key ideas correctly express the key sentence.

restate key idea: most people can learn to swim in ten short lessons.

restate key idea: the majority of water-accident victims require mouth-to-mouth breathing.

restate key idea: an empty, tightly closed gallon jug will support a tired swimmer.  

restate key idea: first aid is to prevent accidents as well as assist in rescue.

explanation: the key idea needs to have the same topic as the key sentence (drowning and safety).

hmm, sadly there is no dialogue. there is no place in the story where he is talking to anyone. it's more of just describing what he eats and where he sleeps. you have to become anne frank, give details of where you are, what other folks look like, how the environment is. have a little bit of dialogue tell of what people are specifically saying. anne frank talked about her entire household including the people, the objects, the lighting, the food they ate, and even the smell in the air. there has to be more to your diary entries, the whole story in its current state is only about peter van daan, the food, the sounds, and where he sleeps. also he seems to be writing only once a year yet more than that happened from day to day. for a friend, i can you write it out, if you want.

to eliminate ambiguous remote or broad reference it is necessary to focus on anaphoric reference. by definition "anaphoric reference means that a word in a text refers back to other ideas in the text for its meaning." the references should be clear and leave no room for ambiguity.

in the first case the pronoun it probably refers to the car but it has not been mentioned before so we should replace it for the car. in doing so the statement becomes clear.

in sentence number   two   the pronoun he refers to charles dickens the author. yet, the first half of the sentence is about the book a tale of two cities. to repair this it would be better to rephrase the first half : after i read   a tale of two cities by dickens, he so as to remove the remote reference.