(1) His bedroom overlooked a lushly green, perfectly maintained yard featuring a pool area complete with a gazebo, lap lanes, and a diving board. (2) The birds sang, the tall pines swished in the slight breezes, and the hammock hung waiting for a visitor. (3) The beauty and freedom that summer represented called to Jeffrey. (4) With the coolest yard in the neighborhood, he was stuck inside doing stupid makeup work. (5) The problem indicated his lack of responsibility, but he still resented the situation. (6) Ugh, he thought, just wanting to call his buddies and, like, go play in the pool. (Click on two quotations from the passage that need to be changed to fit the style and tone of the paragraph.)

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explanation:

1. the details that would clarify the authors purpose for writing would be after the "haley collected used soccer jersey and sent them to guatemalan children." part, he would say, "and you can also donate today to save ". so far in the text, you can see no such thing. if, near the end the author persuades you to donate to guatemalans, then you know that the author's reason to write is to persuade you.

2. what details would make the text more engaging is to see the guatemalan children's reaction to getting free jerseys.

3. the details that convey the author's attitude would be an opinion by the author, for example, if he said, "haley was a very nice girl " or, you can find the attitude by finding parts of haley's personality that he highlights. you can strengthen your tones by using more descriptive words, and simplify long sentences as much as you can.

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explanation:

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