Write a draft about the secret garden

Ok so Mary is a little girl whos parents died, she ends up moving in with Archibald Craven, her uncle. She then later on meets a boy who is supposedly sick- he ends up being Colin, who is Master Craven's ten-year-old son. One day as Mary is walking down the sidewalk with a bird, a gust of wind moves some of the ivy on the stone wall beside her. Under the ivy is a door, which Mary unlocks with the key she found the day before. Thus when she opens the secret door she finds herself standing inside the secret garden. While talking to Colin he throws a tantrum to make Mary into spending more time with him but shes fed up with his attitude and yells at him. She shows him that he really isn't sick like everyone says he is. Later after befriending Colin, she shows him her secret garden, to her surprise it belonged to his mother. Together they nurse the garden back to health.

yes the first one is correct .