Besides the revisions listed in the paragraph, what else can Deepak do to strengthen his paper? He should try to keep all of his sentences the same length. He should use more than one technique to integrate his evidence. He should make sure he has a transition for every sentence in the paper. He should avoid extended definitions that provide too much information

Read the paragraph that Deepak wrote to explain how he used a checklist to revise his paper.

I checked my transitions to make sure they made sense. I also reread my sentences to determine whether they were too similar in style and length. I fixed a couple to add variety. I found one or two words that needed extended definitions and added them. I made sure that I summarized all research evidence throughout the paper.

Besides the revisions listed in the paragraph, what else can Deepak do to strengthen his paper?

He should try to keep all of his sentences the same length.

He should use more than one technique to integrate his evidence.

He should make sure he has a transition for every sentence in the paper. He should avoid extended definitions that provide too much information.

He should use more than one technique to integrate his evidence.

Explanation:

Based on the revisions listed in the paragraph, the other thing that Derek can do to strengthen his paper is to make use of more than one technique to integrate his evidence.

Based on the given paragraph, there are revision techniques that are employed to eliminate errors and ambiguity,so therefore for Deepak to improve the quality of his work, he should use more than one technique as doing it this way will make reading less monotonous and more interesting.

1. read the following excerpt from franklin d. roosevelt's "fireside chat 19":

on the other side of the picture, we must learn also to know that guerilla warfare against the germans in, let us say serbia or norway, us; that a successful russian offensive against the germans us; and that british successes on land or sea in any part of the world strengthen our hands.

remember always that germany and italy, regardless of any formal declaration of war, consider themselves at war with the united states at this moment just as much as they consider themselves at war with britain or russia. and germany puts all the other republics of the americas into the same category of enemies. the people of our sister republics of this hemisphere can be honored by that fact.  

the true goal we seek is far above and beyond the ugly field of battle. when we resort to force, as now we must, we are determined that this force shall be directed toward ultimate good as well as against immediate evil. we americans are not destroyers — we are builders.

analyze the effectiveness of this excerpt. how does it function within the speech as a whole? how does the structure of the excerpt to convey the speech's purpose and key points? support your argument with evidence from the speech. (10 points)

1. read the following excerpt from franklin d. roosevelt's "fireside chat 19":

on the other side of the picture, we must learn also to know that guerilla warfare against the germans in, let us say serbia or norway, us; that a successful russian offensive against the germans us; and that british successes on land or sea in any part of the world strengthen our hands.

remember always that germany and italy, regardless of any formal declaration of war, consider themselves at war with the united states at this moment just as much as they consider themselves at war with britain or russia. and germany puts all the other republics of the americas into the same category of enemies. the people of our sister republics of this hemisphere can be honored by that fact.  

the true goal we seek is far above and beyond the ugly field of battle. when we resort to force, as now we must, we are determined that this force shall be directed toward ultimate good as well as against immediate evil. we americans are not destroyers — we are builders.

analyze the effectiveness of this excerpt. how does it function within the speech as a whole? how does the structure of the excerpt to convey the speech's purpose and key points? support your argument with evidence from the speech. (10 points)