Verb Usage 8.2: Question 3 The following is from a student's rough draft essay. She needs to
revise her writing to use literary present tense. What is the best
revision?
In The Hunger Games, when Katniss visited the mayor's daughter,
she received a Mockingjay pin, which she later wore as a symbol of
the rebellion against the Capitol.

greet them:

buenas noches.

that is considered night time which is when "good night" is used.

the sentence that avoid faulty coordination is:

culture, which is well represented in philadelphia, plays a major role including theatre, music, and the visual arts.  

faulty coordination occurs when the writer gives equal importance two different ideas (clauses) which in fact are not equivalent. in order to correct a misplaced clause or idea, the writer can place less important or emphatic ideas in a relative clause as in the previous sentence.