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You and nine peers have been selected to apply for an important college scholarship. Only one student will be awarded the scholarship. You have been asked to write a brief essay to the scholarship committee in which you share an important event in your life that significantly changed you, your view about life, your life goals, or your character for the better. Apply narrative techniques, a solid prewriting strategy, and creative sentence patterns to share your story and stand apart from other applicants.

Check my grammar: dear mr. peter szulczewskisubject: loyal customer’s complainti visited wish. com last month and found a 2-terabyte hard drive for only $69.99, an alive aquarium piranha fish for $7.99 and an unlocked samsung galaxy s9 phone for $599.99. the price of such quality item got me to buy all three of them thinking it is exactly what the description and pictures shows it be. the items arrived today and i am for giving me an actual samsung galaxy s9 for a low price but i got lied about the two other items, i know it doesn't always happen but we are losing our trust everytime it happens. i got 500gb hard drive and a plastic sardine fish. i thought i saved money but a 500-gigabyte hard drive should only be worth $40 and i am ok that they gave me a plastic fish because it is only $8 but they gave me a sardine plastic fish which is a very uninteresting species of fish and i have no use for it. you again for the phone. i like buying in your website and admire the prices you give to your items. i will not ask for a refund for the fish and hard drive but you should tell your sellers to use a truthful descriptions of their products because if they keep deceiving us, you might lose a lot of loyal customers. sincerely, russell john javierloyal customer

Me with english (easy for you) 50 points

Where does the receiver live in the giver?