Read the student sample essay and think about which revisions would make it more effective

Review the detail. beethoven chooses to stay when the children beg him to play more. which is the best inference that can be drawn about beethoven?

She took up a scalpel and slit the monkey's abdomen, making a slow and gentle cut, keeping the blade well away from her gloved fingers. the spleen was puffed up and tough, leathery, like a globe of smoked salami. she did not see any bloody lesions inside this monkey. she had expected that the monkey's interior would be a lake of blood, but no, this monkey looked all right, it had not bled into itself. if the animal had died of ebola, this was not a clear case. she opened up the intestine. there was no blood inside it. the gut looked okay. then she examined the stomach. there she found a ring of bleeding spots at the junction between the stomach and the small intestine. this could be a sign of ebola, but it was not a clear sign. it could also be a sign of simian fever, not ebola. therefore, she could not confirm the presence of ebola virus in this animal based on a visual inspection of the internal organs during necropsy.

Read the summary of the first three paragraphs of “the world on turtle’s back.”[1] in the beginning, there was no land, only the great ocean. [2] the sky-world, the home of the gods, was above the ocean. [3] a sacred tree stood at the center. [4] one of the gods pulled out some of its roots for his pregnant wife. [5] this created a hole in the floor of the sky-world. [6] the man's wife fell through the hole toward the ocean below, clutching the roots in her hand. which is the best way to combine sentences 4 and 5? a) one of the gods pulled out some of its roots for his pregnant wife, which created a hole in the floor of the sky-world. b) one of the gods pulled out some of its roots for his pregnant wife, he created a hole in the floor of the sky-world. c) one of the gods pulled out some of its roots for his pregnant wife which created a hole in the floor of the sky-world. d) one of the gods pulled out some of its roots for his pregnant wife he created a hole in the floor of the sky-world.