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English, 03.05.2020 13:34 Gabby2581

This is one of my body paragraphs to an essay. and i have to do all 4 of these things to revise it.
1. Review your paragraph for coherence. Make sure you have a topic sentence and supporting ideas for this topic.
2. Combine two or more sentences in your paragraph for varied syntax.
3. Review your paragraph for correct English language conventions. Correct any errors.
4. Write a short reflection paragraph on the revisions you made, describing the changes you made and how these changes improved your writing.

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This is the paragraph that needs to be revised
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To begin with, jellyfish are multiplying by thousands on the daily. Jellyfish can release 40,000 eggs daily. This causes there to be swarms of jellyfish, which can eventually become blooms. In the passage “jellyfish take over” it states “In the Black Sea, blooms of Mnemiopsis jellyfish are responsible for millions of dollars in losses for the local fishery industries who catch and sell anchovies” This means that because there are swarms and blooms of jellyfish all over the world, its causing the local fishers industries to lose money because of all the jellyfish. For example, if you are running a business, and there is something that is keeping you from being able to make money, you will end up losing money because you won't have anything to sell. In the text “jellyfish take over” it states, “Some species of jellyfish can release up to 40,000 eggs daily! It’s no wonder that these swarms could turn into blooms.” to elaborate, that more and more jellyfish are being produced daily, and they are all staying attached to each other and traveling in swarms and becoming blooms that can affect the environment. And not in a good way.

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