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Lan Dog sleep in the tent with us tonight Dad I ask grabbing Dog around the belly so that he can't run
pff after a frenzied squirrel We can't have that Sarah Dad says The tent is for humans Dog wants to
sleep outside where the air is fresh If any dog deserves to sleep inside it's him I say Plus it's raining Dog
oves the rain says Dad Gloopy brain, gloopy brain he sings Dad is always singing to himself He's that
cort of dad No Dog hates the rain I say defiantly as Dog breaks free and trots off cheerfully through the
nammering drops into the under brush He's having the time of his life says Dad Now get inside before
ou're soaked I'll lead Dog over to the others My furs are soggy and my tangled hair is full of drips |
eave Dad to chase after Dog and I clamber into the tent

        "Can Dog sleep in the tent with us tonight, Dad?" I ask grabbing Dog around the belly so that he can't run

        "Pff, after a frenzied squirrel! We can't have that Sarah." Dad says "The tent is for humans Dog wants to sleep outside where the air is fresh."

         "If any dog deserves to sleep inside it's him!" I say.

          "Plus it's raining, Dog loves the rain!" says Dad "Gloopy brain, gloopy brain!" he sings Dad is always singing to himself He's that sort of dad.

"No, Dog hates the rain!" I say defiantly as Dog breaks free and trots off cheerfully through the Hammering drops into the under brush

     "He's having the time of his life!" says Dad "Now get inside before you're soaked, I'll lead Dog over to the others!" My furs are soggy and my tangled hair is full of drips, I leave Dad to chase after Dog and I clamber into the tent.

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Can Dog sleep in the tent with us tonight, Dad?" I ask grabbing Dog around the belly so that he can't run

       "Pff, after a frenzied squirrel! We can't have that Sarah." Dad says "The tent is for humans Dog wants to sleep outside where the air is fresh."

        "If any dog deserves to sleep inside it's him!" I say.

         "Plus it's raining, Dog loves the rain!" says Dad "Gloopy brain, gloopy brain!" he sings Dad is always singing to himself He's that sort of dad.

"No, Dog hates the rain!" I say defiantly as Dog breaks free and trots off cheerfully through the Hammering drops into the under brush

    "He's having the time of his life!" says Dad "Now get inside before you're soaked, I'll lead Dog over to the others!" My furs are soggy and my tangled hair is full of drips, I leave Dad to chase after Dog and I clamber into the tent.

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sensory details?

so i`m assuming you are writing something from a bats (the animal) point of view. if this is the case, you can use sights, sounds, feelings, and tastes.

and idk what you mean by domain, but all of the sensory details will depend on where the bat is.

a bat doesn't see color very well, so its surroundings will be dulled.

it can hear super well. so maybe it can hear the insects on the ground

feelings. you can imagine how a bat would feel from its perspective. it all depends on where it lives.

maybe it can taste the salt in the air, or smell water, or something. all of these details are completely dependent on where it is located.

hope this .

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