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boxes that apply.
The writing style is exciting, and the author
uses precise words.
I was hiking on a crisp, clear autumn morning
when a snake came slithering toward me. "It's
probably just a garter Snake," I thought. As
the snake slithered nearer, I spotted a rattle
at the tip of its tail. I jumped back with a gasp.
The Snake was poisonous!
The passage includes sensory details, such
as what the narrator saw and heard.
The passage makes it easy to decide how the
narrator felt during the event.
The event is told in a reasonable sequence.
DONE
) Intro

The narrator felt scared- surprised, in a bad way. This makes the readers interested, more interested how it ends, since you've got a good start.

beginner

government is strong when they have the ability to persuade those they govern to believe government has enough power to force them or should be forcing them to do government’s will.

when enough of the citizenry do not believe government can force them or should force them to do its bidding, government has lost or will lose its strength and power to coerce.

when enough of the citizenry do believe government can force or should force them to do its bidding, they become passive at the least or actively pro-government and repeat government’s own rhetoric to pass on what they have been persuaded by government’s propaganda.

a true majority isn’t always needed to govern or to stop government. many times all that is needed is a strong minority. if a determined 30% of the population rises up against government in a concerted effort to bring it down, this size minority usually will succeed as long as those actively opposing the minority are less in force than the minority. so if 41% of the population sits at home watching tv rooting for one side or the other, they don’t matter. it’s the active parties who make a difference.