Read the paraphrase of the story henrique wrote.

the soldiers walked through the rain as they approached the canyon. they’d been traveling for days to reach the dragon’s lair. finally they arrived. then the dragon approached, and it roared. yet, the soldiers faced off with the dragon, despite the noise.

which is the best critique explaining why henrique should revise the paraphrase?

henrique needs to change the sequence of events to be in a logical order.
henrique needs to add some descriptive language to make the story come alive.
henrique needs to add some dialogue to make the point of view consistent.
henrique needs to change the point of view to make the sequence clearer.

The best critique explaining why Henrique should revise the paraphrase is (B) Henrique needs to add some descriptive language to make the story come alive.

Explanation:

The given passage of the story “Henrique” appears to be very bland and doesn’t catches the readers attention. The author is talking about the soldiers and their bravery. If he adds more descriptive language depicting how soldiers fought with the dragon and had a face off, it will become more appealing. The story would become alive in that case. So, the correct option is option B.

The order of the events is correct. So, option A is incorrect. Option C doesn’t apply because there is no need of any dialogue between the soldier and dragon. And the point of view is also clear, so option D doesn’t apply as well.

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