Write a new topic sentence for the following paragraph.

without knowing how to make and stick to a budget, many recent graduates end up without enough savings to give them afloat if they lose their jobs or if their business go under. for these people, finacial education is particulary important because they'll also be responsible for the financial decisions of the next generation.

my kite was more beautiful than the others.

→the other kite were less beautiful than mine

my kite was biger than the others.

→the other kites were less big than mine  

were not as big as mine

climax

after following, but not really , the young hunter on his search for the heron, sylvia slips out of bed alone in the middle of the night to find the heron for herself. perched at the top of a gigantic pine tree, sylvia spots the heron, and its nest, in a dead hemlock tree across the way. the following morning she returns home to find her grandmother and the hunter waiting for her at the door. in the moment when she plans to tell the hunter where to find the heron, she suddenly decides to protect the heron and remain silent; even the promise of much needed money does not sway her.

explanation:

the second sentence is a great revision in my opinion. that would be a great topic.

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