Practice creating a dramatic scene. create three to five sentences that paint an image in the reader’s mind. in each sentence include at least one of the following: simile, metaphor, alliteration, personification, onomatopoeia, hyperbole, and connotation. label each sentence with the device you used. (note: you will not necessarily use all of these devices.)

Hey there! Hopes this helps! I am in drama class so this will be really dramatic.

Explanation: It might have name-calling...

The two burglar men notice Freddy and freeze.

Freddy: Hey, boys…come in, relax.  Grab a seat on the sofa.

(Freddy sips his coffee)

It’s okay, the sofa won’t bite.

(both men sit)

Do me a favor and take those nylon masks off your face so I can look at you.  What is this the seventies?

(Freddy laughs)

There you are.  (beat)  Coffee, anyone?  A buddy of mine gets it sent to him from Cuba and I must say that the coffee beans from there are impeccable.  Such a smooth taste.  Would you gentlemen like a cup of Cuba?

Man# 1: No thanks.

Freddy: Don’t be rude.  Introduce yourself first before answering me…this way I know the proper way to address you.

Tobey: Tobey.

Freddy: No coffee, Tobey?

Tobey: No, thank you.

Man #2: What’s your name?

Freddy: My name? Excuse me, Freddy, Freddy Ferrara…

Jack: I’m Jack.

Freddy: Nice to me you, Jacky Boy.  Coffee?

Jack: Sure.

(Freddy shoots Jack in the forehead and sips his coffee)

Freddy: Tobey, it’s alright.  These things happen.  Breaking in and entering, it’s a tricky business.

Tobey: Ah, Oh My Gosh!

Freddy: Yes, yes, I know.  Was it your brother?

Tobey: Fff, fff, fff—

Freddy: Friend.

Tobey: Yeah!

Freddy: It’s okay.  Want a cup of coffee?

Tobey: No!  Oh God please no, no coffee.

Freddy: Okay, okay.  So, what were you boys doing here?

Tobey:  Mmm, mmm, mmoney.

Freddy: You came to this dump for money?  Surely you boys could have stepped up the real estate.  There are plenty of neighborhoods just twenty miles east from where we’re sitting.  That was a mistake, I’m afraid.  (beat) Stop looking at him. He’s dead.  Looking at him isn’t going to bring him back.  Take that throw blanket and put it over him, if it will help you some.  Go ahead…

(Tobey is shaking.  He can barely place the blanket over Jack)

I’ve always been a good judge of character.  Jacky Boy had an attitude straight away and I can’t go in for that sort of thing, you know?  Not where I come from.  You, you are much more polite and well mannered.  It goes a very long way with me.

- the heat nearly killed them that first summer.