Can someone with grammar and make it sound professional !

I, personally, thought they would look more like Johnny Depp, but instead they looked more like Sid, from Ice Age. Then, the leader of the group tried to communicate with me, but I only understood English.

Hope this helps. Just as a suggestion, try to separate your sentences when they change topic so they don’t turn into run-ons.

the purpose of the heading in the passage is to identify who is telling the story.

this excerpt is part of the book sugar changed the world (2010) written by marc aronson and marina budhos. as the book has been written by two people, the heading "marc" indicates that this specific excerpt is being narrated by aronson. in the fragment, marc describes his grandfather's story after hearing it from his cousin. however, there are other excerpts where budhos is the one that tells the story of her family.

aronson and budhos, who are husband and wife in real life, decided to write sugar changed the world when they found out how sugar, which had an important role in slavery and economy, changed their ancestors' lives.