How could a change in emphasis best develop the events in this passage, making for a more interesting and exciting read?
the author could spend even more time discussing the preparations for takeoff.
the author could shorten details about mckee's preparations and describe how exciting and dangerous the rocket flight was and tell the
adventures that took place during colonization of saturn
the author could list and explain the different dials and switches in the cockpit to show how the advanced technology of the shuttle works, with
plenty of intricate technical detail
the author could focus the story solely on mckee's careful preparation for the trip, noting what he had for lunch and the clothes he wore.