Here’s a short story I wrote. Tell me what you think :) (The main characters are kangaroos and since they live in Australia I had to type as if their Australian. I’m American though so the ‘accent’ is probably horrible lol)

Willow And Kipper- A trip to the Juice Bar

“Good day, mate! How about a little dash to the juice bar, eh?” Willow the kangaroo asks his friend.
“Sounds jolly good, mate! Let’s hop on over!” Kipper the kangaroo replies.
“Righty-O then!” Willow says.
They hopped on over to Juice Smack, their typical hang-out spot. They were greeted by JoJo the koala.
“Ello mate! What’ll it be for you lads today?” JoJo asks.
“Hmm, I’ll take a Fresh Kiwi Bubbler Smoothie and a Traditional Davidson’s Plum Scone. How about you, Kipper?”
“I’ll have the same as her.”
“Righty then. There are benches next to the loo so have a seat over there.”
“Thanks, mate.” Willow says.
Willow and Kipper hop over to the benches and take a seat next to each other. On there right sits their grandma’s friend Melanie the Kangaroo. She has her daughter's little one, Frankie the Kangaroo in her pouch. Frankie waves at us as she bounces her tennis ball against the back wall.
“Hello Kip. Hello Willy.”
“Good day, Frankie! Are you ordering a smoothie?” Kipper asks her.
“Yeah! Grammy said I could have whatever I liked today as a special treat!”
“Ooh sounds fun! What’d you choose?” Willow asks.
“A green salad with fresh tomatoes and a Strawberry Punch Smoothie.”
Just then JoJo called Melanie and Frankies order so they went and picked it up after telling them a quick goodbye. Willow and Kipper waited a few more minutes before JoJo called up their order.
“Crikey, this is delicious!” Kipper and Willow say on their way home.
They walk inside the house to find something red leaking from under the couch. They lift up the cushions to see where the leak is coming from. Then they see it… a body. The body of Melanie. They scream and run outside. But in their bedroom waiting for them. I followed them to the juice bar, watched them talk to Melanie and Frankie, then followed them home and broke in. Here I am now, holding the bloody knife I used to kill their friends.
Staring…
Grinning…
Waiting...